Assignment 3
Snow White and 7 giants
Once upon a time in cold Korso, there was this white beautiful girl with long dark hair. She was just a casual girl from a small town. Her name was Lumikko. One day Lumikko met a giant called Kari. Kari was one of the best beer drinkers in Korso. Kari was also good at Hot-dog stand fights. He was pretty much the champion of everything in Korso. Someday Kari asked Lumikko on a date to Sir kippis the local pub of Korso. Lumikko kindly agreed and was super happy about it.
When Lumikko and Kari got to the pub they took a few beers. Later Karis friends came to the pub and he introduced his friends to Lumikko. Karis giant friends were called Räkä, Öykkä, Yrjö, Urpo, Pekka, and Matti. Räkä had a big nose and was the smallest of them all. Öykkä was the biggest and always tried to start a fight against someone but nobody was willing to because all of them were scared of him. Yrjö was always drinking beer and puked everywhere. Urpo was the dumbest of them and always had bad ideas. Pekka was the wisest of the giants and always told Urpo how dumb he was. Matti did all the drugs in the world and was super aggressive.
Kari and Lumikko and the boys were casually drinking beer in the pub but Matti had slid drugs in Lumikkos drink and was gonna rape her but the others didn't know about it. When Lumikko started not feeling well Matti wanted to take her to the bathroom but the others didn't let her go with Matti because they knew about his past and he had done this trick before. When Lumikko collapsed to the floor Kari instantly knew what was going on so he and the boys attacked Matti. Lumikko was laying on the floor and Kari kissed him so she woke up and slapped Kari in the face and asked what was going on. Kari and the boys explained to her the situation and Lumikko was happy for what they did. Matti went to jail and Kari and Lumikko started dating and lived happily ever after in small Korso.
The grammar is good, and I don’t really see many mistakes in this text besides some small errors like for example “karis friends” should be “kari’s friends” or using words like “gonna”. While “gonna” is English it shouldn’t really be used in text since it’s more spoken English than written English, so it should be written as “going to”. In some sentences I think it would’ve been better to add a comma to make some sentences more natural, but otherwise It was a good text. The plot was good and your take on the story of Snow White and the 7 dwarves was interesting to say the least, even though I feel the story falls a bit short.
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